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Hey dad, when are you coming home?
My mom and I feel so alone
I just wanted to write a letter
To see if you are feeling better
I know that our conversation wasn't long
But I know our love is still strong
I always look out the window
But not seeing you makes me become sorrow
Please dad come back home
I don't want you to be alone....
©2009 ~Brennen1013
:iconbrennen1013:

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This is a story about a kid wrighting a letter to his dad in Irac

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:iconlazarus12:
Want some critique? Alright is very good and I see the emotion, although so some speeling errors such as Irac=Iraq wright=write. Also mellow is a short of happy feeling...so yeah

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There is no such thing as innocence, only varying degrees of guilt.
:iconbrennen1013:
uh huh
lol the strangesting thing is bro im failing english >.>

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I rather be scilent and thought of a fool than to speak out and remove all dout
:iconlazarus12:
Hmm what a suprise :D

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There is no such thing as innocence, only varying degrees of guilt.
:iconbrennen1013:
shut up lol
what i was trying to do in that story was put it in a little kids world (which cant spell just like me) but i guess mellow wouldn't make since regarless if ir was a kid or not

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I rather be scilent and thought of a fool than to speak out and remove all dout
:iconmrsjanusz:
heyy brennen i like this lol
this is kinda sad

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blondes have more fun no matter what you say
:iconlazarus12:
Its not bad :D I didnt know that, I was just corecting ya, so yeah only wrong part was teh mellow part. Kepp up the good work

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There is no such thing as innocence, only varying degrees of guilt.
:iconbrennen1013:
yeah

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I rather be scilent and thought of a fool than to speak out and remove all dout
:iconbrennen1013:
yeah ,
got any requests???

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I rather be scilent and thought of a fool than to speak out and remove all dout
:iconlazarus12:
Hmm....Fear.

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There is no such thing as innocence, only varying degrees of guilt.

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